RULE's One Bar Feedback Thread

[RULE]

RULE's One Bar Feedback Thread


Simply this is what you do: Post ONE bar (no more than two lines in a regular text box) and i'll give you my critques on it. So it probably makes sense to post a bar thats typical of your usual standard and style. Also a brief bit of info that relates to the bar (Opponents name, personal references etc etc) would be helpful.


Just one bar per person please, remember im here to give my opinion, not to berate or belittle anyone.


RULEISM's

I have some phrases i use that might not be understood so i'll explain them here


Ghost bar: A bar so flawed in its execution and premise that i'd consider it a 0/10

Insult-Worthy: A concept that actually isnt an insult. It sounds strange but it happens often.

Bar Relevancy: When a bar has a theme or topic that is consistant in it.

Soft-Syllable: A syllable that is pronounced softly and therefore can clash when paired with a solid syllable.



Holla!

[RULE]

RULE's One Bar Feedback Thread


Simply this is what you do: Post ONE bar (no more than two lines in a regular text box) and i'll give you my critques on it. So it probably makes sense to post a bar thats typical of your usual standard and style. Also a brief bit of info that relates to the bar (Opponents name, personal references etc etc) would be helpful.


Just one bar per person please, remember im here to give my opinion, not to berate or belittle anyone.


RULEISM's

I have some phrases i use that might not be understood so i'll explain them here


Ghost bar: A bar so flawed in its execution and premise that i'd consider it a 0/10

Insult-Worthy: A concept that actually isnt an insult. It sounds strange but it happens often.

Bar Relevancy: When a bar has a theme or topic that is consistant in it.

Soft-Syllable: A syllable that is pronounced softly and therefore can clash when paired with a solid syllable.



Holla!

This your "Last Ride," you need a HEARSE, CAUSE YOU'RE DEAD... "He'll Manage A Paul Bearer" if he doesn't 'URN' MY RESPECT!!(Heel Manager Paul Bearer.)

Edit: It's an Undertaker bar...

This your "Last Ride," you need a HEARSE, CAUSE YOU'RE DEAD... "He'll Manage A Paul Bearer" if he doesn't 'URN' MY RESPECT!!(Heel Manager Paul Bearer.)

Edit: It's an Undertaker bar...

If this 'Party Rockin' it's cuz my people SWELLED AN FLEXED THEY CHROME. Now it's X see and he knows it' so I pop some SHELLS AND WHEN THEY BLOW it's 2 hits and you never hear from 'em again L.M.F.A.O

Party Rock and Sexy and I know it were 2 of LMFAO's hits and then they fell off like eczema flakes

If this 'Party Rockin' it's cuz my people SWELLED AN FLEXED THEY CHROME. Now it's X see and he knows it' so I pop some SHELLS AND WHEN THEY BLOW it's 2 hits and you never hear from 'em again L.M.F.A.O

Party Rock and Sexy and I know it were 2 of LMFAO's hits and then they fell off like eczema flakes

[Obey]

But his bars are ‘Unable to come back:’ it’s only the TRUTH TO SAVE YA on a ‘respirator w/ lines, gassed up:’ it’s only USED TWO DAYS, THE way you’re ‘Falling asleep unwillingly:’ it looked like some YOUTH IN ASIA.. (To daze ya/Euthanasia>-_-)

Oh & this was for Grizz.

[Obey]

But his bars are ‘Unable to come back:’ it’s only the TRUTH TO SAVE YA on a ‘respirator w/ lines, gassed up:’ it’s only USED TWO DAYS, THE way you’re ‘Falling asleep unwillingly:’ it looked like some YOUTH IN ASIA.. (To daze ya/Euthanasia>-_-)

Oh & this was for Grizz.

Neither of you have followed the rules.

Neither of you have followed the rules.

Rules were meant to get bent. So were you, get bent.

Rules were meant to get bent. So were you, get bent.

[IV]

Yo I spit so sick you'll die of aids like EAZY E
I'm gunna rename "the floor" the way you SEE DA FEET / DEFEAT

EXPO: sick as in not feeling well and sick as in dope and Eazy E had aids and then da feet sounds like defeat

[IV]

Yo I spit so sick you'll die of aids like EAZY E
I'm gunna rename "the floor" the way you SEE DA FEET / DEFEAT

EXPO: sick as in not feeling well and sick as in dope and Eazy E had aids and then da feet sounds like defeat

@IV wins.

@IV wins.

[Obey]

Originally Posted by BLNK

Neither of you have followed the rules.

In this thread we're all followers of @RULE ..

[Obey]

Originally Posted by BLNK

Neither of you have followed the rules.

In this thread we're all followers of @RULE ..

Yeah, because no one has made that reference before.

Yeah, because no one has made that reference before.