Letsbeef Topical Magazine: Issue #6

IT'S DONE! We have finally reached the end of the Anonymous Topical Tournament. I have to say, it was a dope tournament through and through and we managed to kick some life into this section and finally give it a bit of prestige. We've had some new high level writers appear, as well as a lot of guys looking to continue elevating. Voting was pretty strong throughout and the scene is being set for a great showing in the PPV.

So, without further adieu, your 2012 Anonymous Topical Tournament Champion is...
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DONO!

Dono managed to get a 5-2 nod over Jam Jar in the finals to bring home his first Letsbeef topical title.




Iron Mike
It was hard to decide between Mike and Law. Law was very helpful in the early parts of the tournament, dropping a lot of helpful votes. Mike however I think has been the best voter near the end of the tournament, and has been really helpful with closing some of the battles when less people are likely to vote. So I appreciate all the voting Law has done, but the Voter of the Tournament is Iron Mike.

Jam Jar

Digital Love

This is no heart-warming story, it’s pitiful stuff
The tale of my fall into Digital Love
Aged 13, fresh faced, feeling awkward and daft
My girl saw the small size of my Pork Sword and laughed
I ran to my bedroom, embarrassed, forlorn
And found my safe refuge in internet porn
My young teen eyes boggled at motions of flesh
At perma-tanned asses all lotioned and fresh
One hand on my dick and one hand on my mouse
I shot my first load, as he shot in her mouth.
The next day, again, and again and some more
Eventually every girl seemed like a whore
Technology merged with my dark adolescence
The cum soaked my keyboard, no stark evanescence.
For seven long years, not a human hand touched me
Addicted to porn like a man with a crutch, see
The thing that supported me, made me feel worse
I saw visions of loneliness, sexual curse.
Then up popped a pop-up that solved all my dreams
A scenario thought of and planned up it seems
By an all-seeing eye who answered my prayers
A robotic woman to fuck without cares.
It’s programmed to grind when you give ‘On’ a nudge
Literally technically unable to judge
Won’t cry or be needy or beg for caresses
Just switch off when finished, a few button presses.
But here, ten years later, with her in my bed
Electrical shocks scar my penis’s head
I’m in need of an upgrade, I need a new patch
To download some life to that cyber-dry snatch.
In winter the nodes and the wires in her belly freeze
Hate the sight of her red and green nipples-slash- LEDs
I can’t buy her no apps, that costs more than my Love affords
Thinking ‘Is it incest to jerk on your own Motherboards?’
Think back seventeen years, my first sight of that skin
The pulsating peach writhing, smelling of sin
I see my morbid reflection in her dead metal eye
Enter the Pass for her pussy, and let out a sigh.

Vs

Enfinite



"God > Man > Machine > God"

"Genesis"

When life started, things were simple and pure,
No disease, no famine, no whimpers, or hurt.
God was almighty, before sinners were birthed,
But he was betrayed by three little words.
"Eat the Apple"

"Exodus"

The Apple was bitten, the world would swirl and thrust,
God's heart hurt to pump, he was hurt by love,
The atmosphere roared, animals struggled to run,
Man I had no idea, God shed a tear, the world would flood.

"Birth of Democracy"

Over the years God watched Man, full of knowledge,
Even ways to enhance our mind through schools and college,
Kingdoms became Nations, Rulers allotted,
By the people, for the people, grand laws in,
Old rules abolished.

"The Telephone"
Inventions were spouting, some passed, other straight up failed,
But the most noticeable of the era was the phone,
By Alexander Graham Bell.
This was the start of a Godless time,
God took in a breath and muttered "Man has fell".

"1970's, The Computer Boom"
Technology was booming, church was dying,
Computers popped up, so was the hurt, the crying,
We were up in the skies with our creations,
But oh so ignorant, and blinded....

"2000's, Absence of God"
People ask where God has been, honest confusion,
But the problem is they didn't pray when asking,
They were on their computers....
God is refusing to stop the pollution,
He gave us free will, we chose and forgot what the truth is....

"Exodus II"
Robots and artificial life will come,
Replacing spouses and replacing God,
Virtual worlds replacing houses, faking loss,
The world outside cry's and weeps,
God also cry's and weeps,
Because he knows history goes full circle and often repeats.
He stares down on a once beautiful creation,
And before he ends the very thing he loves most,
He looks over, and acknowledges he's losing to satan.
"You've proven me wrong Lucifer, man has not changed"
Satan responds,
"They are in love with MY world, your dream have lost their way"
God stepped back, and let the world burn to ashes,
We blame God but, it was our words that acted,
And showed our stirless actions.
But we should of saw the coming with all our knowledge,
But the world dies, and we fall to darkness.....

IT'S DONE! We have finally reached the end of the Anonymous Topical Tournament. I have to say, it was a dope tournament through and through and we managed to kick some life into this section and finally give it a bit of prestige. We've had some new high level writers appear, as well as a lot of guys looking to continue elevating. Voting was pretty strong throughout and the scene is being set for a great showing in the PPV.

So, without further adieu, your 2012 Anonymous Topical Tournament Champion is...
.
..
...
....
.....
......
.......
........
.........
..........
DONO!

Dono managed to get a 5-2 nod over Jam Jar in the finals to bring home his first Letsbeef topical title.




Iron Mike
It was hard to decide between Mike and Law. Law was very helpful in the early parts of the tournament, dropping a lot of helpful votes. Mike however I think has been the best voter near the end of the tournament, and has been really helpful with closing some of the battles when less people are likely to vote. So I appreciate all the voting Law has done, but the Voter of the Tournament is Iron Mike.

Jam Jar

Digital Love

This is no heart-warming story, it’s pitiful stuff
The tale of my fall into Digital Love
Aged 13, fresh faced, feeling awkward and daft
My girl saw the small size of my Pork Sword and laughed
I ran to my bedroom, embarrassed, forlorn
And found my safe refuge in internet porn
My young teen eyes boggled at motions of flesh
At perma-tanned asses all lotioned and fresh
One hand on my dick and one hand on my mouse
I shot my first load, as he shot in her mouth.
The next day, again, and again and some more
Eventually every girl seemed like a whore
Technology merged with my dark adolescence
The cum soaked my keyboard, no stark evanescence.
For seven long years, not a human hand touched me
Addicted to porn like a man with a crutch, see
The thing that supported me, made me feel worse
I saw visions of loneliness, sexual curse.
Then up popped a pop-up that solved all my dreams
A scenario thought of and planned up it seems
By an all-seeing eye who answered my prayers
A robotic woman to fuck without cares.
It’s programmed to grind when you give ‘On’ a nudge
Literally technically unable to judge
Won’t cry or be needy or beg for caresses
Just switch off when finished, a few button presses.
But here, ten years later, with her in my bed
Electrical shocks scar my penis’s head
I’m in need of an upgrade, I need a new patch
To download some life to that cyber-dry snatch.
In winter the nodes and the wires in her belly freeze
Hate the sight of her red and green nipples-slash- LEDs
I can’t buy her no apps, that costs more than my Love affords
Thinking ‘Is it incest to jerk on your own Motherboards?’
Think back seventeen years, my first sight of that skin
The pulsating peach writhing, smelling of sin
I see my morbid reflection in her dead metal eye
Enter the Pass for her pussy, and let out a sigh.

Vs

Enfinite



"God > Man > Machine > God"

"Genesis"

When life started, things were simple and pure,
No disease, no famine, no whimpers, or hurt.
God was almighty, before sinners were birthed,
But he was betrayed by three little words.
"Eat the Apple"

"Exodus"

The Apple was bitten, the world would swirl and thrust,
God's heart hurt to pump, he was hurt by love,
The atmosphere roared, animals struggled to run,
Man I had no idea, God shed a tear, the world would flood.

"Birth of Democracy"

Over the years God watched Man, full of knowledge,
Even ways to enhance our mind through schools and college,
Kingdoms became Nations, Rulers allotted,
By the people, for the people, grand laws in,
Old rules abolished.

"The Telephone"
Inventions were spouting, some passed, other straight up failed,
But the most noticeable of the era was the phone,
By Alexander Graham Bell.
This was the start of a Godless time,
God took in a breath and muttered "Man has fell".

"1970's, The Computer Boom"
Technology was booming, church was dying,
Computers popped up, so was the hurt, the crying,
We were up in the skies with our creations,
But oh so ignorant, and blinded....

"2000's, Absence of God"
People ask where God has been, honest confusion,
But the problem is they didn't pray when asking,
They were on their computers....
God is refusing to stop the pollution,
He gave us free will, we chose and forgot what the truth is....

"Exodus II"
Robots and artificial life will come,
Replacing spouses and replacing God,
Virtual worlds replacing houses, faking loss,
The world outside cry's and weeps,
God also cry's and weeps,
Because he knows history goes full circle and often repeats.
He stares down on a once beautiful creation,
And before he ends the very thing he loves most,
He looks over, and acknowledges he's losing to satan.
"You've proven me wrong Lucifer, man has not changed"
Satan responds,
"They are in love with MY world, your dream have lost their way"
God stepped back, and let the world burn to ashes,
We blame God but, it was our words that acted,
And showed our stirless actions.
But we should of saw the coming with all our knowledge,
But the world dies, and we fall to darkness.....

Dono

All officers weapons free - That's what he said to me
Trained, though nothing could have prepared me mentally
An ecstasy of energy running through me
Future opponents, in this moment I'm loving duty
Chaos all around, tons of heat, rioters run the streets
Facing their armaments and some carry guns at least
I can finally shun my leash and find some release
Cause I'm guessing that life lessons are fun to teach
So loud, the adrenaline has heightened my senses
Frightened, defenceless, some try to hide from the menace
Others scream, wildly thrashing, incomprehensible babble
Words I can't piece together cause I've never played scrabble
My vision is clear too, despite rolling black smoke
The ashes of a destroyed neighbourhood that only had hope.

Two targets approach, mounting a car, shouting from far
Clearly with violent intent, no doubting a spar
One holds a bottle in hand, aflame, soaked in gasoline
I smell it, one of many items used to trash the scene
We approach slowly, as a unit, staying steady
As those men motion maliciously, each step weighing heavy
The one in red acts first, lobbing his Molotov cocktail
We're too slow and it drops well, flaming up a hot spell
Hit an officer, I watch as he's engulfed in flame
I know his name and am impacted with tenfold the pain
It's my partner, I've met his daughter, his father
Hoped our training together would have gotten us farther
He let out a sound, an awkward awful yelp from hell
As protective gear fails oozing into a melted shell
Knew him since I was barely born, watching flesh boil
Death oil, smokeless in the air as the stench coils
My brain shuts down, drills deleted, pure animal thoughts
Engage target, kill, find weakness in any tangible spots
I lunge through the air, knocking the assailant over
Car to ground, hard impact, could easily break his shoulder
But that doesn't matter, he shoulda tried running faster
Dumb ass bastard, they never showed me the blood would splatter
I hear officers yell "back!" But those notes are void
As I clamp jaw to jugular, instantly his throat destroyed
Our eyes meet, for me, it's a nice treat to watch his death
Knowing revenge is mine alone, I stopped his breath

Police speak "Oh god, what's with the dog acting all mental
Two killed already and he won't come back to the kennel
The scenario worsens, getting harder to fight it
And now one of our own officers is part of the riot"






Dono is no stranger to topicals. After dipping his toe in the water with the early Letsbeef topical tournaments, he signed up to Netcees/Text Stars and got involved in the ISTL competition, one that I was previously in charge of. He had a great showing and the experience did wonders for him.
Not long after, he made it to the semi finals of the 2011 Topical GC, the Quarter Finals of the first 2012 Topical GC (With him not losing yet being eliminated?) and the final of the second 2012 Topical GC. With these high rankings in the tournaments, finally Dono has solidified him as perhaps Letsbeef's best topical writer, winning the first ever Anonymous Topical Tournament on LB.
With his lyricism, storytelling and poetic techniques, Dono doesn't possess a weakness, and it's hard to see anyone knocking him off the top spot in the near future.
He will now go into the PPV Main Event, where he will take on an unnamed opponent for the first ever Letsbeef Topical Championship Belt.


Achievements
2013 Anonymous Topical Tournament Champion

Notable Works
Start naming your topicals dickhead.
2013 ATT Final Enterant (Writer 1)
Untitled Topical Verse
2013 ATT Semi Finals Enterant (Writer 2)
07-16-12
07-10-12
Against One's Will
05-01-12
10-01-12

Dono

All officers weapons free - That's what he said to me
Trained, though nothing could have prepared me mentally
An ecstasy of energy running through me
Future opponents, in this moment I'm loving duty
Chaos all around, tons of heat, rioters run the streets
Facing their armaments and some carry guns at least
I can finally shun my leash and find some release
Cause I'm guessing that life lessons are fun to teach
So loud, the adrenaline has heightened my senses
Frightened, defenceless, some try to hide from the menace
Others scream, wildly thrashing, incomprehensible babble
Words I can't piece together cause I've never played scrabble
My vision is clear too, despite rolling black smoke
The ashes of a destroyed neighbourhood that only had hope.

Two targets approach, mounting a car, shouting from far
Clearly with violent intent, no doubting a spar
One holds a bottle in hand, aflame, soaked in gasoline
I smell it, one of many items used to trash the scene
We approach slowly, as a unit, staying steady
As those men motion maliciously, each step weighing heavy
The one in red acts first, lobbing his Molotov cocktail
We're too slow and it drops well, flaming up a hot spell
Hit an officer, I watch as he's engulfed in flame
I know his name and am impacted with tenfold the pain
It's my partner, I've met his daughter, his father
Hoped our training together would have gotten us farther
He let out a sound, an awkward awful yelp from hell
As protective gear fails oozing into a melted shell
Knew him since I was barely born, watching flesh boil
Death oil, smokeless in the air as the stench coils
My brain shuts down, drills deleted, pure animal thoughts
Engage target, kill, find weakness in any tangible spots
I lunge through the air, knocking the assailant over
Car to ground, hard impact, could easily break his shoulder
But that doesn't matter, he shoulda tried running faster
Dumb ass bastard, they never showed me the blood would splatter
I hear officers yell "back!" But those notes are void
As I clamp jaw to jugular, instantly his throat destroyed
Our eyes meet, for me, it's a nice treat to watch his death
Knowing revenge is mine alone, I stopped his breath

Police speak "Oh god, what's with the dog acting all mental
Two killed already and he won't come back to the kennel
The scenario worsens, getting harder to fight it
And now one of our own officers is part of the riot"






Dono is no stranger to topicals. After dipping his toe in the water with the early Letsbeef topical tournaments, he signed up to Netcees/Text Stars and got involved in the ISTL competition, one that I was previously in charge of. He had a great showing and the experience did wonders for him.
Not long after, he made it to the semi finals of the 2011 Topical GC, the Quarter Finals of the first 2012 Topical GC (With him not losing yet being eliminated?) and the final of the second 2012 Topical GC. With these high rankings in the tournaments, finally Dono has solidified him as perhaps Letsbeef's best topical writer, winning the first ever Anonymous Topical Tournament on LB.
With his lyricism, storytelling and poetic techniques, Dono doesn't possess a weakness, and it's hard to see anyone knocking him off the top spot in the near future.
He will now go into the PPV Main Event, where he will take on an unnamed opponent for the first ever Letsbeef Topical Championship Belt.


Achievements
2013 Anonymous Topical Tournament Champion

Notable Works
Start naming your topicals dickhead.
2013 ATT Final Enterant (Writer 1)
Untitled Topical Verse
2013 ATT Semi Finals Enterant (Writer 2)
07-16-12
07-10-12
Against One's Will
05-01-12
10-01-12

The Lost City

From my window’s vantage,
I looked down on the city Atlantis
as its concrete streets sunk swiftly and vanished
beneath the bleak seas. Whirling windy, it vanquished
the howls of this steel child left drifting, abandoned.
And I saw the city’s many penniless, gritty and famished;
standing stranded on rooftops of the flimsiest canvas.
The emptiest hands get ignored. … Poor city Atlantis;
men died, clenched in the grips of this withering mammoth.
Others floated on blind faith and miniscule promises,
wrapped in deflated inner tubes. The citadel’s hostages
lay trapped in liquid spools of a brutal fate’s embrace,
to waste away in bitter pools of human waste, they pray.

And I watched as Death leapt from the sea
a hungry thief,
plundering the crumbled streets in its drunken feast.
Liquid tentacles tickled piano notes; brushed the Keyes,
swallowing the audible garbles of a trumpet’s plea.
From my vantage…I watched their futile scuffles for air.
Atlantis became a vibrant canvas of water-colored despair.
The ash-black, pastel blue faces of the oxygen starved,
formed a macabre mosaic with every single carcass involved
in this masterpiece of atrophy; painted asphyxiation;
the ideographic images for pain’s heinous deviations.
I watched
as Death celebrates this abhorrent devastation
and horrid decimation. Rotting corpses elevating
over the somber sea, with determined dissent,
fled their graves for the ocean water’s Current events.
The dead danced in the streets and delight in the throngs
of zombie citizens, singing overzealous zydeco songs.
Long stretches of road, adorned with the poor and dejected,
mingled with the corpses the water’s force resurrected.

And we watch,
far and removed as the horrors ensue,
ignoring a truth that gallons of sea water couldn’t dilute.
It’s safe to voyage into voyeurism…It’s so easy to watch
when the needy are propped up on stages and seated in hot
spotlights. From our vantage, pain takes center stage. And
it’s easy to blame the victim, when it’s only entertainment.
We throw down any payment for the show and say it killed,
while they try to soak up ocean water with the paper bills.

But…
from my window’s vantage,
I can’t help but love the poor city Atlantis
as its concrete streets sink swiftly and vanish.
It’s poor denizens, looking up for a chance to be saved
While Death arises like flood waters
to dance on their graves…








A Chilling Tale

Written by Richard Corey

More losers to laugh at, wait, shit, one of these guys won.

Here are the names of the participants in the Final of the Anonymous Topical Tournament.

Writer 11 (1st) / Writer 3 (2nd) / Writer 3 (QF) / Writer 1 (SF) / Writer 2 (F) – Jam Jar (Previously defeated SideEight, Enfinite & InCizion)
Writer 31 (1st) / Writer 2 (2nd) / Writer 4 (QF) / Writer 2 (SF) / Writer 1 (F) – Dono (Defeated prospectJS, Row, The Law & Jam Jar)

prospectJS

Navigating Hell

I wake up this morning from a terrible night with four-missed-calls
as I return them back and hear a word from the phone,
I already sensed that there was more-shit-wrong
"homie guess what?! *sigh* tego got stabbed up yesturday.. the poor-kid's-gone"
damn..
the only thing that's rotating around my head is couldn't the killer solve it a different way?
or-fist-brawl?

this left me with no option but to blame his father's-absence
i say this because all tego did for a living was sell ganja-and-spliff..
just for some dollars-and-whips
plus he was repping a gang so the killer must of did this to honor-his-clique
as payback, since they lost one of their own in the past due to the same issue
but what can you do about it.. karma's-a-btch...
there was only one word to describe everyone's feelings for this slaughter.. shockness!
hoping tego would of got the chance to live farther-than-this
*shake's head* this defitnetly gon be hard-to-forget
i'm just lookin around, tryna find a jar-for-a-tip
as suddenly my heart-shred-to-bits

wow..
i just can't believe that both gang's massive-hating-dwelled
& aggravation-swelled
to the point, that all that matters to them is giving each other some tragic-facing-Ls
now unfortunately, the both caskets-raising-fell..

i still cant believe these two warriors last moment in this earth were savage, dangerous, well..
i guess what happens, happens and no one can change that spell
but sadly, they joined a gang for protection and a family
without realizing that it was just the first step for the road trip of navigating-hell!


Violent Scripture: A decent topical, but there were some flaws. I felt that the flow was very choppy in some places and it made the reading of it to be very awkward at times. I also felt that some of the rhyming was stretched and it almost turned into story telling instead of spoken word. My final issue was some of the vocabulary used, as some of the words attempted aren't even words and it really takes away from a rating. Overall a decent piece, but there are flaws that can definitely be corrected.

Punk: The story was good.. But the structure through me off everywhere.. With topicals, you have to make it so where the flow is easier to pick up instead of people having to re-read parts over and over.. The wording can use a lot of work. This is just some basic rhyming put together as a whole to sound great when it only sounds sorta good. Your punctuations were-not-needed-here also. You want the readers full attention by setting it up the right way, have an interesting story, & overall, a dope topical.




SHEEP LORD

End it Like This

Been through the beats, couldn’t pick my producers pre-mixed shit
Had to spit it acapella, then he told me I’ll mix it when you’re done/
Flipping through books reading like philosopher
From Greek metaphors to civil war treasure troves
Making my mind go thru the barrel rolls like we’re in a Tail’s spin/
Knowledge behaves the way you take it and spray
Had to kick rocks, and hit the strip to get with my crew
And score some chicks but bricks is what my click had in mind/
Speak to cats on the block, had to catch my second wind
Now they asking me to sin, sell something that’s supposed to help me win
Didn’t want to get caught them with bags on me and up the river sticks
Just for trying to make a few bucks, some cheddar and chips
Just to get a decent single just to be mixed not including a whip for the trip/
Peep months later debating bars speaking on topics alone in ciphers
Had me super hyper, single bout to drop then producer lost the mix
Kicking and screaming I’m pissed about to HULK SMASH!!! In this bitch/
Flip the lid the demo, got stuck on a bad hard drive
Luckly I had the emailed copy, smart cookie wasn’t born no emcee rookie/
Gets a call from my homie up the block asking if I still carrying that sword
I come out the box, and lock horns with sons trying to game my homes jawn/
Get off the bench minds are minced meat, these cats ask what’s your problem
I said get the fuck back, sword slash guns clash move fast
This ain’t no western, someone’s dying tonight…ARGHHHH!!!!/
Cut to black, walk off the set, role the credits
Watch out, see what comes next is the director’s cut … coming soon/

The sequels leave it those that want to end beautiful
This ain’t no flick for your wifey this is blood bath
End it like grapes of wrath; end it like blood on the dance floor
End like Frankenstein hype off of rhymes,
End it like Einstein drunk fucking sixteen bitches
Making sure there triplet pairs of dimes
Think he’s going to solve his equation by eating her equator out

Violent Scripture: A good piece, but has some flaws in terms of the poetic sense of it. Not really much rhyming, as it felt like it was a story being told instead of poetry. Just work on the poetic side of it and you will be fine.

Fidel Z: Well, His topical verse was okay, I don’t know if it’s just me but it barely rhymed and it was pretty basic, Also some of the things he said didn’t really make sense to me “ knowledge behaves the way you take it and spray” . Overall the thing that bothered me the most about his topical is that it didn’t rhyme at all, cuz that’s what attracts me to topicals, so in my opinion it’s an okay topical.




HariZon

Stereotypical

The same crowd that vouches for unjust kinds,
Fruit drum mimes that dance to the music in mind.
Telepathy, arguing with the conscience at hand,
Chloroform; soaking each ounce of will to withstand.
Mending the wounds treading atop the skin of his life,
Catastrophic but in light it only succumbs the message to fight.
Lessons contrite; bitin the tongue of lucifer holdings,
Monkey see, monkey do.. So have a seat for this scolding!!!
We tend to with hold and never let the best come forth,
Drain the pipe of rejection and rid acceptance of all sorts.
.
.
My mission is clear and cause I'm a certain race or kind,
Shouldn't wither the stride I'm givin' for changing the times.
Catalyst; with a reproach that tests the the mind,
Ravaging the most sacred temple that other pray to indict.
Just like you- so stop assuming my right and giving me shine,
Let me blend with the lines I scribble, print my name, date and sign!!!

Live free or die trying...

Punk: First off, a very solid piece.. One thing you need to work on is using schemes for your topicals. Here was just a different rhyme after another but it was still pretty cool. Not pulling anything from it. And a stronger vocabulary could help as well. Not just throwing down random words but it has to make sense and flow at the same time. Try reaching for much smoother openers as well. It's become sort of a issue with a few people but you'll get the hang of it by practicing.. Overall, i liked it man. Keep it up..

Fidel Z: In my opinion his topical verse was dope, I loved the rhyme scheme of it he was consistent throughout his whole verse by also having inner rhymes which made it flow even better, and I liked his use of vocab, and sophisticated wording and how he went into detail describing his topic, overall I didn’t really see anything wrong with his topical pretty solid.

The Lost City

From my window’s vantage,
I looked down on the city Atlantis
as its concrete streets sunk swiftly and vanished
beneath the bleak seas. Whirling windy, it vanquished
the howls of this steel child left drifting, abandoned.
And I saw the city’s many penniless, gritty and famished;
standing stranded on rooftops of the flimsiest canvas.
The emptiest hands get ignored. … Poor city Atlantis;
men died, clenched in the grips of this withering mammoth.
Others floated on blind faith and miniscule promises,
wrapped in deflated inner tubes. The citadel’s hostages
lay trapped in liquid spools of a brutal fate’s embrace,
to waste away in bitter pools of human waste, they pray.

And I watched as Death leapt from the sea
a hungry thief,
plundering the crumbled streets in its drunken feast.
Liquid tentacles tickled piano notes; brushed the Keyes,
swallowing the audible garbles of a trumpet’s plea.
From my vantage…I watched their futile scuffles for air.
Atlantis became a vibrant canvas of water-colored despair.
The ash-black, pastel blue faces of the oxygen starved,
formed a macabre mosaic with every single carcass involved
in this masterpiece of atrophy; painted asphyxiation;
the ideographic images for pain’s heinous deviations.
I watched
as Death celebrates this abhorrent devastation
and horrid decimation. Rotting corpses elevating
over the somber sea, with determined dissent,
fled their graves for the ocean water’s Current events.
The dead danced in the streets and delight in the throngs
of zombie citizens, singing overzealous zydeco songs.
Long stretches of road, adorned with the poor and dejected,
mingled with the corpses the water’s force resurrected.

And we watch,
far and removed as the horrors ensue,
ignoring a truth that gallons of sea water couldn’t dilute.
It’s safe to voyage into voyeurism…It’s so easy to watch
when the needy are propped up on stages and seated in hot
spotlights. From our vantage, pain takes center stage. And
it’s easy to blame the victim, when it’s only entertainment.
We throw down any payment for the show and say it killed,
while they try to soak up ocean water with the paper bills.

But…
from my window’s vantage,
I can’t help but love the poor city Atlantis
as its concrete streets sink swiftly and vanish.
It’s poor denizens, looking up for a chance to be saved
While Death arises like flood waters
to dance on their graves…








A Chilling Tale

Written by Richard Corey

More losers to laugh at, wait, shit, one of these guys won.

Here are the names of the participants in the Final of the Anonymous Topical Tournament.

Writer 11 (1st) / Writer 3 (2nd) / Writer 3 (QF) / Writer 1 (SF) / Writer 2 (F) – Jam Jar (Previously defeated SideEight, Enfinite & InCizion)
Writer 31 (1st) / Writer 2 (2nd) / Writer 4 (QF) / Writer 2 (SF) / Writer 1 (F) – Dono (Defeated prospectJS, Row, The Law & Jam Jar)

prospectJS

Navigating Hell

I wake up this morning from a terrible night with four-missed-calls
as I return them back and hear a word from the phone,
I already sensed that there was more-shit-wrong
"homie guess what?! *sigh* tego got stabbed up yesturday.. the poor-kid's-gone"
damn..
the only thing that's rotating around my head is couldn't the killer solve it a different way?
or-fist-brawl?

this left me with no option but to blame his father's-absence
i say this because all tego did for a living was sell ganja-and-spliff..
just for some dollars-and-whips
plus he was repping a gang so the killer must of did this to honor-his-clique
as payback, since they lost one of their own in the past due to the same issue
but what can you do about it.. karma's-a-btch...
there was only one word to describe everyone's feelings for this slaughter.. shockness!
hoping tego would of got the chance to live farther-than-this
*shake's head* this defitnetly gon be hard-to-forget
i'm just lookin around, tryna find a jar-for-a-tip
as suddenly my heart-shred-to-bits

wow..
i just can't believe that both gang's massive-hating-dwelled
& aggravation-swelled
to the point, that all that matters to them is giving each other some tragic-facing-Ls
now unfortunately, the both caskets-raising-fell..

i still cant believe these two warriors last moment in this earth were savage, dangerous, well..
i guess what happens, happens and no one can change that spell
but sadly, they joined a gang for protection and a family
without realizing that it was just the first step for the road trip of navigating-hell!


Violent Scripture: A decent topical, but there were some flaws. I felt that the flow was very choppy in some places and it made the reading of it to be very awkward at times. I also felt that some of the rhyming was stretched and it almost turned into story telling instead of spoken word. My final issue was some of the vocabulary used, as some of the words attempted aren't even words and it really takes away from a rating. Overall a decent piece, but there are flaws that can definitely be corrected.

Punk: The story was good.. But the structure through me off everywhere.. With topicals, you have to make it so where the flow is easier to pick up instead of people having to re-read parts over and over.. The wording can use a lot of work. This is just some basic rhyming put together as a whole to sound great when it only sounds sorta good. Your punctuations were-not-needed-here also. You want the readers full attention by setting it up the right way, have an interesting story, & overall, a dope topical.




SHEEP LORD

End it Like This

Been through the beats, couldn’t pick my producers pre-mixed shit
Had to spit it acapella, then he told me I’ll mix it when you’re done/
Flipping through books reading like philosopher
From Greek metaphors to civil war treasure troves
Making my mind go thru the barrel rolls like we’re in a Tail’s spin/
Knowledge behaves the way you take it and spray
Had to kick rocks, and hit the strip to get with my crew
And score some chicks but bricks is what my click had in mind/
Speak to cats on the block, had to catch my second wind
Now they asking me to sin, sell something that’s supposed to help me win
Didn’t want to get caught them with bags on me and up the river sticks
Just for trying to make a few bucks, some cheddar and chips
Just to get a decent single just to be mixed not including a whip for the trip/
Peep months later debating bars speaking on topics alone in ciphers
Had me super hyper, single bout to drop then producer lost the mix
Kicking and screaming I’m pissed about to HULK SMASH!!! In this bitch/
Flip the lid the demo, got stuck on a bad hard drive
Luckly I had the emailed copy, smart cookie wasn’t born no emcee rookie/
Gets a call from my homie up the block asking if I still carrying that sword
I come out the box, and lock horns with sons trying to game my homes jawn/
Get off the bench minds are minced meat, these cats ask what’s your problem
I said get the fuck back, sword slash guns clash move fast
This ain’t no western, someone’s dying tonight…ARGHHHH!!!!/
Cut to black, walk off the set, role the credits
Watch out, see what comes next is the director’s cut … coming soon/

The sequels leave it those that want to end beautiful
This ain’t no flick for your wifey this is blood bath
End it like grapes of wrath; end it like blood on the dance floor
End like Frankenstein hype off of rhymes,
End it like Einstein drunk fucking sixteen bitches
Making sure there triplet pairs of dimes
Think he’s going to solve his equation by eating her equator out

Violent Scripture: A good piece, but has some flaws in terms of the poetic sense of it. Not really much rhyming, as it felt like it was a story being told instead of poetry. Just work on the poetic side of it and you will be fine.

Fidel Z: Well, His topical verse was okay, I don’t know if it’s just me but it barely rhymed and it was pretty basic, Also some of the things he said didn’t really make sense to me “ knowledge behaves the way you take it and spray” . Overall the thing that bothered me the most about his topical is that it didn’t rhyme at all, cuz that’s what attracts me to topicals, so in my opinion it’s an okay topical.




HariZon

Stereotypical

The same crowd that vouches for unjust kinds,
Fruit drum mimes that dance to the music in mind.
Telepathy, arguing with the conscience at hand,
Chloroform; soaking each ounce of will to withstand.
Mending the wounds treading atop the skin of his life,
Catastrophic but in light it only succumbs the message to fight.
Lessons contrite; bitin the tongue of lucifer holdings,
Monkey see, monkey do.. So have a seat for this scolding!!!
We tend to with hold and never let the best come forth,
Drain the pipe of rejection and rid acceptance of all sorts.
.
.
My mission is clear and cause I'm a certain race or kind,
Shouldn't wither the stride I'm givin' for changing the times.
Catalyst; with a reproach that tests the the mind,
Ravaging the most sacred temple that other pray to indict.
Just like you- so stop assuming my right and giving me shine,
Let me blend with the lines I scribble, print my name, date and sign!!!

Live free or die trying...

Punk: First off, a very solid piece.. One thing you need to work on is using schemes for your topicals. Here was just a different rhyme after another but it was still pretty cool. Not pulling anything from it. And a stronger vocabulary could help as well. Not just throwing down random words but it has to make sense and flow at the same time. Try reaching for much smoother openers as well. It's become sort of a issue with a few people but you'll get the hang of it by practicing.. Overall, i liked it man. Keep it up..

Fidel Z: In my opinion his topical verse was dope, I loved the rhyme scheme of it he was consistent throughout his whole verse by also having inner rhymes which made it flow even better, and I liked his use of vocab, and sophisticated wording and how he went into detail describing his topic, overall I didn’t really see anything wrong with his topical pretty solid.

With InCizion

EtH
InCizion

Hello
Hola
Very Hawaiian of you. How are you this fine summer's eve?
Hawaiian? lol you mean Spanish...... and Summer has been alright just working hard... except for now so I can do this interview...You mean Aloha
I meant a Hawaiian person who's parents spoke only Spanish, so they speak Spanish although they are nationally Hawaiian. Of course, work Vs topical interview? Nah, sorry boss.
Interview wins everytime!...
Ironically that's how you get a job that you can blow off. So onto the relevant matter. What do you think of the topical section on LB?
There are some real good writers here...you being one of them, it's got me wanting to write more.. stay focused and test my skills
Aw shucks. How long have you been writing for now?
Seriously for about 10 years (sorry boss just walked in)....but were good!
Tell him that if he gives you into trouble, I'll write a diss cypher on him. That'll put him in his place. And yeah, what has kept you writing for this long?
It's a women, as a matter of fact I'm the only guy at this small office...... The love of Hip Hop has kept me writing this long.. and working with some good writers throughout he years at different Forums...
You should have an orgy, I heard they are fun. Do you think you'll be writing for the next 10 years?
Probably not to be honest. I took the last couple of years off becasue I got burnt out. I've written about so many topics I find it harder to find fresh concepts
Yeah sometimes you could get into rewriting mode where you go back over something you did a few years before. How did you feel about going out in the semi finals? I know you were interested in who defeated you, and it was Jam Jar, an ACs teammate.
I don't like losing to anybody, it's a pride thing! I thought my drop was not bad for the picture that was given. Believe it or not I don't read the comments about the drops until a week or so after.... So if there is a harsh comment it'll not sting as hard...lol.... Only one comment bugged me and that was the one that some said they lost interest in reading my drop... That I don't understand.... Glad I lost to an AC member if anyone
*Hopes it wasn't me who said that* You are now scheduled to face Dissizit (a slight edit on the earlier line up) in the PPV. Do you think you'll be able to mount an attack at the championship?
It depends on the readers.... Your at the mercy of whoever is willing to read your drop and post THEIR opinion.... Even if I beat someone it does not always mean my drop was hands down the better drop it just means those who took the time to read it liked it.... Same go's if I lose a battle... Through the years I take it in stride now...
Yeah. I usually don't like to read my opponent's verse because I'll pick out flaws and when I get voted against, I feel like I'm being cheated despite the clear bias I have. Anyways, thanks for taking the time out of your busy work for the interview. Any last words for the people pretending they read the whole mag?
Fuck anybody who doubts your skills, work hard and learn from others!... Why as why if you don't even try!...
Long live Martin Luther King. Thanks.

Topical Tutorial Part 3: Flow and Vocabulary

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2. Flow and Vocabulary
These two elements are key to a strong and effective topical verse. Your flow should always be smooth and on point.

Check out Richard Corey's tutorial: Flow 101 for some nice tips on basic rhyming. It's pretty simple and easy to pick up...he goes through the syllable rhyming and flow. Inners and Multies always help with your rhyme scheme as well. Sometimes lines get way stretched, a way to avoid that is by using lots of inners, and making the lines concise. An inner is basically rhyming within the line. For example:

Stuck on Borders and Programmed Disorders
Destoring polls and woes and Life's Recorders

Not only does this accentuate the flow of your verse, but it keeps it interesting, keeps the piece up beat. You're not monotonous this way, and good inners reflect well on complexity, especially with the rhyme scheme. If you can develop a constant rhyme scheme with constant inners every few lines or so, it'll work wonders for your pieces. Multies are related to inners. However, they are slightly more complex, because they're multiple syllable rhyming. I'm sure you've heard PJK talking about multis before. He's written quite a few tutorials on multis, so I won't need to elaborate much. Here's an example of a multi:

escaping moral's ascention
retracing quarrel's prevention

Notice how each word rhymes with the word in it's corresponding position, and usually the syllables are matched as well.

As far as vocabulary is concerned, get advanced, but not too advanced or you'll detract from the overall message of your piece. You don't want to get advanced to the point where the reader has no idea what you're talking about, unless that's what you intended to happen...lol. Sometimes big words detract from the flow of your verse too, so be sure to pay attention to syllables and enunciation. Simple words can work sometimes, but usually aren't your best choice if you want a graphic verse with good imagery (which will be elaborated on later). Avoid rhyming the same word twice, it detracts from the flow of your piece. Here's an example of vocab use:

But let go, (1)escaping (2)ascention, prevention
Of the closest (3)confrontation, In this Nation
Of (4)Incarceration, Of (5)deprivation, I'm stating

1. and 2. Escaping was used because in the line, because it is a loaded word (you should know what this phrase means, if you don't, go ask your English teacher) and I am saying I tried to get away from progress. This goes directly into number two, because instead of progress, I used the word ascention. It's a more connotative (this is a word you should look up and understand if you don't already know it) word than elevate, which is common especially on these boards, and progress, which doesn't really bring as many images to ones mind.
3. Confrontation is another way of saying running into, bringing up, but it makes that idea concise and brings it into one word that can have so many different meanings with the same central idea.
4. and 5. Incarceration instead of jail, not only because it rhymes, but it gives the word more emotion, more depth and feeling. The same goes for deprivation. Being deprived of something brings up more images and emotions or lacking something, or hungry, being cold, lonely, etc. Deprived is a very very connotative word and when used well, can entice your mind and trigger lots of emotions and images.

Sometimes your pronunciation is different from someone elses, maybe because of accents or just the way you were taught to read it. Keep that in mind, always. Remember, flow and vocabulary can either make your piece excellent and among the best or it can hurt you, no matter how great the message was, without a flow, the reader won't be as interested in the piece, and weak vocabulary won't conjour as many images as you intended to have.



Code:
Tutorial written by shaojin594
Originaly posted on b-boys.com
Taken from ProjectRhyme.com

With InCizion

EtH
InCizion

Hello
Hola
Very Hawaiian of you. How are you this fine summer's eve?
Hawaiian? lol you mean Spanish...... and Summer has been alright just working hard... except for now so I can do this interview...You mean Aloha
I meant a Hawaiian person who's parents spoke only Spanish, so they speak Spanish although they are nationally Hawaiian. Of course, work Vs topical interview? Nah, sorry boss.
Interview wins everytime!...
Ironically that's how you get a job that you can blow off. So onto the relevant matter. What do you think of the topical section on LB?
There are some real good writers here...you being one of them, it's got me wanting to write more.. stay focused and test my skills
Aw shucks. How long have you been writing for now?
Seriously for about 10 years (sorry boss just walked in)....but were good!
Tell him that if he gives you into trouble, I'll write a diss cypher on him. That'll put him in his place. And yeah, what has kept you writing for this long?
It's a women, as a matter of fact I'm the only guy at this small office...... The love of Hip Hop has kept me writing this long.. and working with some good writers throughout he years at different Forums...
You should have an orgy, I heard they are fun. Do you think you'll be writing for the next 10 years?
Probably not to be honest. I took the last couple of years off becasue I got burnt out. I've written about so many topics I find it harder to find fresh concepts
Yeah sometimes you could get into rewriting mode where you go back over something you did a few years before. How did you feel about going out in the semi finals? I know you were interested in who defeated you, and it was Jam Jar, an ACs teammate.
I don't like losing to anybody, it's a pride thing! I thought my drop was not bad for the picture that was given. Believe it or not I don't read the comments about the drops until a week or so after.... So if there is a harsh comment it'll not sting as hard...lol.... Only one comment bugged me and that was the one that some said they lost interest in reading my drop... That I don't understand.... Glad I lost to an AC member if anyone
*Hopes it wasn't me who said that* You are now scheduled to face Dissizit (a slight edit on the earlier line up) in the PPV. Do you think you'll be able to mount an attack at the championship?
It depends on the readers.... Your at the mercy of whoever is willing to read your drop and post THEIR opinion.... Even if I beat someone it does not always mean my drop was hands down the better drop it just means those who took the time to read it liked it.... Same go's if I lose a battle... Through the years I take it in stride now...
Yeah. I usually don't like to read my opponent's verse because I'll pick out flaws and when I get voted against, I feel like I'm being cheated despite the clear bias I have. Anyways, thanks for taking the time out of your busy work for the interview. Any last words for the people pretending they read the whole mag?
Fuck anybody who doubts your skills, work hard and learn from others!... Why as why if you don't even try!...
Long live Martin Luther King. Thanks.

Topical Tutorial Part 3: Flow and Vocabulary

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------

2. Flow and Vocabulary
These two elements are key to a strong and effective topical verse. Your flow should always be smooth and on point.

Check out Richard Corey's tutorial: Flow 101 for some nice tips on basic rhyming. It's pretty simple and easy to pick up...he goes through the syllable rhyming and flow. Inners and Multies always help with your rhyme scheme as well. Sometimes lines get way stretched, a way to avoid that is by using lots of inners, and making the lines concise. An inner is basically rhyming within the line. For example:

Stuck on Borders and Programmed Disorders
Destoring polls and woes and Life's Recorders

Not only does this accentuate the flow of your verse, but it keeps it interesting, keeps the piece up beat. You're not monotonous this way, and good inners reflect well on complexity, especially with the rhyme scheme. If you can develop a constant rhyme scheme with constant inners every few lines or so, it'll work wonders for your pieces. Multies are related to inners. However, they are slightly more complex, because they're multiple syllable rhyming. I'm sure you've heard PJK talking about multis before. He's written quite a few tutorials on multis, so I won't need to elaborate much. Here's an example of a multi:

escaping moral's ascention
retracing quarrel's prevention

Notice how each word rhymes with the word in it's corresponding position, and usually the syllables are matched as well.

As far as vocabulary is concerned, get advanced, but not too advanced or you'll detract from the overall message of your piece. You don't want to get advanced to the point where the reader has no idea what you're talking about, unless that's what you intended to happen...lol. Sometimes big words detract from the flow of your verse too, so be sure to pay attention to syllables and enunciation. Simple words can work sometimes, but usually aren't your best choice if you want a graphic verse with good imagery (which will be elaborated on later). Avoid rhyming the same word twice, it detracts from the flow of your piece. Here's an example of vocab use:

But let go, (1)escaping (2)ascention, prevention
Of the closest (3)confrontation, In this Nation
Of (4)Incarceration, Of (5)deprivation, I'm stating

1. and 2. Escaping was used because in the line, because it is a loaded word (you should know what this phrase means, if you don't, go ask your English teacher) and I am saying I tried to get away from progress. This goes directly into number two, because instead of progress, I used the word ascention. It's a more connotative (this is a word you should look up and understand if you don't already know it) word than elevate, which is common especially on these boards, and progress, which doesn't really bring as many images to ones mind.
3. Confrontation is another way of saying running into, bringing up, but it makes that idea concise and brings it into one word that can have so many different meanings with the same central idea.
4. and 5. Incarceration instead of jail, not only because it rhymes, but it gives the word more emotion, more depth and feeling. The same goes for deprivation. Being deprived of something brings up more images and emotions or lacking something, or hungry, being cold, lonely, etc. Deprived is a very very connotative word and when used well, can entice your mind and trigger lots of emotions and images.

Sometimes your pronunciation is different from someone elses, maybe because of accents or just the way you were taught to read it. Keep that in mind, always. Remember, flow and vocabulary can either make your piece excellent and among the best or it can hurt you, no matter how great the message was, without a flow, the reader won't be as interested in the piece, and weak vocabulary won't conjour as many images as you intended to have.



Code:
Tutorial written by shaojin594
Originaly posted on b-boys.com
Taken from ProjectRhyme.com

Good shit @EtH I'm planning to be in the next PPV.

Good shit @EtH I'm planning to be in the next PPV.

Dono's just taking everything i see lol I'll be back to read the full mag once i get back in the house.

Dono's just taking everything i see lol I'll be back to read the full mag once i get back in the house.

Originally Posted by Punk

Dono's just taking everything i see lol I'll be back to read the full mag once i get back in the house.

cause its MM. i gave him that win still

Originally Posted by Punk

Dono's just taking everything i see lol I'll be back to read the full mag once i get back in the house.

cause its MM. i gave him that win still

Yeah Dono reps that shit till death .

Yeah Dono reps that shit till death .

[Jam Jar]

All credit to @EtH for getting this all going and props to @Dono for gently slaughtering me in the final. A agree with the feedback on the Final, and hate myself for rushing through the end of my verse.

[Jam Jar]

All credit to @EtH for getting this all going and props to @Dono for gently slaughtering me in the final. A agree with the feedback on the Final, and hate myself for rushing through the end of my verse.

[RULE]

Shout-out to Dono. Finally getting the gold he deserves.

1/

[RULE]

Shout-out to Dono. Finally getting the gold he deserves.

1/