First of all, writer 7 went over the line limit, which was 20-30 lines. Both took different approaches and made different interpretations of the topic. Writer 9 seemed to identify the person in the image as a teacher addressing the butterflies, which are his students, and giving them advice. Writer 7 seemed to interpret the butterflies as "butterflies in your stomach" or a feeling of love or a crush one might have for a classmate. I enjoyed the flow and cadence from both, but I think writer 9's was a little more structured. Both used imagery well and conveyed emotion. I think writer 7 might have conveyed more emotion, but again he went over the line limit and was thus able to get more into the story. Nice read fellas.
MVGT: Writer 9
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